This was a cool concept and an interesting song to read. You had some spelling and grammar errors though. From the second t stanza, you used the wrong "its". The its you used is possessive, which is incorrect. The proper "it's would have an apostrophe "it is". Imagine the apostrophe is the second "I" in "it is". Secondly, the use of "I'm". You never used "I'm" as in "I am". You need to capitalize the "I'm" and use the apostrophe. In addition, the "I" must be capitalized. In addition to that, you used "ain't" without the apostrophe.
You also spelled "tomorrow" wrong. Overall, you don't really have anything wrong here, with the exception oferrors in capitalization, spelling, punctuation and grammar. So you need to look over that again . Remember your apostrophes, capital letters and spelling and you're good to go!
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