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I got a lot of feels from this poem. When you mention about the angel's missing love i thought a story could come from this. It got great emotions out me and that is okay because that is what poetry is supposed to do is get people to feel. I hope more work comes out because this one a great work of art. This poem made me feel like i needed to go and comfort the poor damsel i loved it.

Oh, this is really sad. It makes me wish I was there to take her in my arms and tell her everything would be all right, to just hold on and make it through somehow. (Although I'd probably end up giving her a lecture instead, in all honesty....) I really loved it, though. It's very beautiful and clear and paints a vivid picture of what this girl is feeling. I think the first part in particular touches a place we've all been before, too..."I want to be fixed, I want to be healed." Who hasn't felt that kind of pain? Thank you for sharing your wonderful poem!

Hello there! Infinity here to review.

Well, what a wonderful poem you have here, I love the real sadness you have here that creates an emotional connection. It had a great flow and was clear and simple to understand. As much as I love this poem there's always room for improvement, but my suggestions will mainly be nit picks, this will probably be a short review.

"I am a broken angel

Walking through the graveyard"

Good opening, but you need a comma after the word angel and there isn't any need for a capital for the word walking as it's part of the same sentence, unless that was intended.


"My companion is not here

He has left me fore dead"

Here, i think you meant "for" dead a typo there for you to edit, re-check your work carefully.


Overall an interesting poem, I hope you keep writing!


-Infinity x

Hey there!
This is a really good poem; Nick already mentioned the strong emotion, which is valuable in effective poetry. I like the flow of it; little punctuation which is cool until the last line, where I think that since it's sort of final with the whole "Goodbye" thing, you should end it with punctuation to, well, end it. Goodbye. End. That sort of thing

However, you do have some two random punctuation marks; I'd say either do all the required punctuation or zero (exception being last line).

Your single spelling error has also already been mentioned, so good job there. I love the way you broke up your sentences into different lines; broken sentences, broken angel = awesome.

Some background for this would be cool; I get it this 'I' character is dying, broken up and now their 'companion' has left them, but is 'I' broken because they left them or did they leave because 'I' is broken? Slightly uncertain but no matter; your poem's theme gets across nicely

Okay I think I would be a better reviewer for this poem if, you know, I actually had any idea what a broken angel felt like. I haven't really gone through any hardships, but this poem pretty much sums up what I feel it would be like. So good job and keep writing!

~ Sarra ~

Diction was excellent for this poem. The harsh words set the tone for being "broken". I wish that you would have stayed with the angel aspect and tied in some kind of symbolism. Human emotions expressed, such as anger and hurt, could be made angelic with soft words mixed in with the harsh words. This would create a soft pain in a way an angel would experience; what you have already seems to be a sharp pain which is too human to be angelic.

Hi Ryia,

Well, it's apparent that you had some strong emotions while writing this piece, which is definitely good. It talks about events we as humans go through on a regular basis such as loss and rejection. I don't have too much to say as far as mechanics go. I think you had one misspelling (left for dead), but that happens to me more often than I care to admit. I like the last line, particularly because of the internal rhyme, but I think if you split it up to match the length of most of your other lines it might be just a bit more aesthetically pleasing, and it won't change much for the rhythm. And of course, you'll probably get people complaining about punctuation and capitalization. Personally, I could care less when it comes to that, but it happens. I'm mostly nitpicking cause there isn't really much else to critique. Good Job!

Happy writing,

Nick