Ok, so I just started writing a novel, and these are the first few paragraphs that I wrote. Just want to see it through everybody else's eyes, feel free to say if there is anything glaringly wrong with the way I write.
Thanks, guys!
"The morning mist clogged the winding street and curled off doorways, but somehow did nothing to damper the irresistible satisfaction that hung about. Bouncing off of the high walls, his single set of his footsteps shattered the calm silence. Brisk as it was, the air attacked Soske’s throat as it combated the remnants of the coffee he had purchased from an opening bakery a few streets before.
A few steps into a side street that wound down into what he hoped was the morning market, a young woman slid back a door and stepped out on a balcony opposite his side of the street. She was wearing a morning dress with a thick shawl wrapped tightly about her.
“Oh, hello.” She hailed cheerfully.
“Morning to you.” Soske halted and looked slightly up.
“Little early for a walk,” She noted. “Cold as well,” As she sniffled.
“It’s fairly warm compared to a few hours ago.” Soske laughed, transferring his duffel bag from his shoulder to the damp sidewalk. Seeing a chance to find his destination, he added, “Hey, could you tell where the market is? I can’t seem to find it.”
“It’s about three streets straight ahead,” She laughed, tucking her blond hair behind one ear. “I run one of the flower stalls there.”
“Thanks.” Leaning down to pick his bag, he tucked the map back under his arm, and started moving forward again.
“See you there.” The girl called.
Soske grinned and waved back, “Thanks again.”
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