Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review!
Let me start out by saying that I really enjoyed reading this poem. I like the words you used and they all seemed to work well together. Honestly, I think this poem sounds very professional. There are a few things that I want to point out that you might want to change.
You can see a beautiful ladies
You can see an ugly faces
I don't know if you meant to make the bolded words plural or not, but it doesn't seem to fit. Since you did it twice, I think you meant to do it so I'll ask, why? If you think about it, the use of plurals here don't really work grammatically. To say that dark can see an ugly faces doesn't make sense. If you use a singular tense than it will work better.
Overall I really like this poem. There's great imagery in this and your wording is good. I kind of had to rush this review so feel free to PM me if you have any questions about this review.
Keep writing!
**Noelle**
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