This was very good, one of your best, I believe. I could almost see the emotion in the words, and I mean that literally, not figuratively. The way you wrote this was absolutely beautiful, with good even stanzas, and a very good rhythm. You took a topic that applies to everyone and made it personal, and yet everyone can relate. (And if you say that you can't, well, you're the very thing that this poem says you're not. Can't figure out what I'm saying, here's a hint.. LIAR!)
The punctuation and grammar is very good, well, the grammar needs a little work.
I already explained the (I) thing to you in the last review, but let me just say that it drives me insane. I really don't care what happens in a work, but my mother and various other people have pounded the fact that stand alone (I's) must always be capitalized. And frankly, it just drives me insane. Sorry, didn't mean to rant. Well, I did, just not at you.
I just really hate it when the (I) is not capitalized. But I think you got that so I'm just going to shut up about it now.
Other than the (I) thing......Not going there again, not going there again.......This was really good.
Peace,
HT
Points: 16710
Reviews: 394
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