I liked this poem-I could tell you had put lots of feeling and emotion into it and spent some time on thinking about imagery, your thoughts and feelings and the editing before posting it. The punctuation confused me slightly because I have never seen so many hyphens ever (and semi-colons before two hyphens)! Also, I think there may have been capital letters in odd places as I didn't quite know when stanzas ended/began and also have a look at your rhyming pattern because it started off without then rhymed at the end. But yeah very effective poem-well done!
tiggpanda145
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