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The Diary of a Cat Fanatic- Chapter 1

by cgirl1118


Dear Diary (don't worry new friend, I'll find a name for you),
I am Kitty. That's not my real name of course, but my name is Kitty. I shall first introduce myself so you know me better. What am I saying?! I'm writing in this notebook like it's an actual living thing. I always knew I was going crazy.
Whatever, let me say that I never thought I would be writing in here. My oh-so-wonderful mom thought that I needed a diary to write in. One day after a crazy school day she handed me this notebook that I'm writing in now. Just so you know, you are a brown leather bound notebook with 200 lined pieces of paper. There's also a little red ribbon bookmark attached to you so I know what page I left off. Now let me get back to the story on how I got you. I told my mom that I don't need one but she kept on insisting that it would help. "It would help you with your feelings. I know from experience." she said. I rolled my eyes, "I don't need help with them mom." My mom kept on telling me to use it and in the end, like always, she won and I had to write in a diary.
So now comes the introduction part where I tell you who I really am.
I am a cat fanatic. I love cats to death and always will. Everything I own has to have a cat on it, even my shoes. One time in fifth grade I wore cat gloves for a year. Yup, that's how crazy I am about cats. At school they call me The Cat Girl. I kind of like the name, it defines who I am. However, the worst thing out of all this is that I don't have a cat. I, The Cat Girl don't have a cat. I know it's crazy! I've begged my parents for years but they always said no. I had many fantasies about having a cat though. He (yes a he) would be named Sir Whiskers the Great and he would wear a red and yellow scarf everyday. Don't ask about the scarf, wait a minute how would you? Anyways....
I hear my mom calling me for dinner so I shall talk to you later!
Sincerely,
Kitty a.k.a The Cat Girl (TCG for short)


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Thu Jul 29, 2021 5:22 am
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

I am Kitty. That's not my real name of course, but my name is Kitty. I shall first introduce myself so you know me better. What am I saying?! I'm writing in this notebook like it's an actual living thing. I always knew I was going crazy.


Well, that's off to a wonderful start, looks like someone perhaps writing in a diary for the very first time there judging by how things are going...aand it seems like a pretty wholesome and innocent experience so far, with them just talking to the diary and then questioning their sanity for a bit, also the name Kitty being used as a pseudonym is pretty interesting too.

Whatever, let me say that I never thought I would be writing in here. My oh-so-wonderful mom thought that I needed a diary to write in. One day after a crazy school day she handed me this notebook that I'm writing in now. Just so you know, you are a brown leather bound notebook with 200 lined pieces of paper. There's also a little red ribbon bookmark attached to you so I know what page I left off. Now let me get back to the story on how I got you. I told my mom that I don't need one but she kept on insisting that it would help. "It would help you with your feelings. I know from experience." she said. I rolled my eyes, "I don't need help with them mom." My mom kept on telling me to use it and in the end, like always, she won and I had to write in a diary.


Alright, looks like we're going to be giving the diary a bit of a backstory here...that's certainly quite interesting, not something that you run into in diary entries too often, but surprisingly enough, it does actually make a lot of sense for someone to write something like this down as their first entry. You sense a little bit of argument having occurred there between this person and the mother but it looks like just a normal one that ended in peace after all, with the mother just trying to help out and the child accepting defeat. I don't sense any animosity there at any rate. Also a pretty cool little description of the diary there.

So now comes the introduction part where I tell you who I really am.

I am a cat fanatic. I love cats to death and always will. Everything I own has to have a cat on it, even my shoes. One time in fifth grade I wore cat gloves for a year. Yup, that's how crazy I am about cats. At school they call me The Cat Girl. I kind of like the name, it defines who I am. However, the worst thing out of all this is that I don't have a cat. I, The Cat Girl don't have a cat. I know it's crazy! I've begged my parents for years but they always said no. I had many fantasies about having a cat though. He (yes a he) would be named Sir Whiskers the Great and he would wear a red and yellow scarf everyday. Don't ask about the scarf, wait a minute how would you? Anyways....

I hear my mom calling me for dinner so I shall talk to you later!


Well, that was a really fun little introduction there...seems like a pretty wholesome child just writing about their experience with cats being something that they adore and have plastered on everything they on. We get a very nice sense of the personality of this person here...and the little secret scarf situation you mention adds such a lovely touch of extra humor into things. I love the feelings that are nicely on display here. It makes it easy for us to imagine the situation of the character quite nicely here.

Overall, a pretty solid piece you've got right here...sounds like something I'd probably read more of here. Great little first chapter you've got. :D

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry




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Tue Aug 20, 2013 5:57 am
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Hello its Charley here to give you a review! :)

This is the most awkwardest, funniest, silliest and greatest thing I have ever seen in my life!
I probably won't have any complaints, because there is no need to its just hilarious!
I figured she'd have like 80 cats, and be one of those crazy cat ladies but no. She's just a Crazy Lady who loves cats even though she dosen't have one.

I just absolutely love this idea for a story, its great, very unique I'd say myself, I cannot wait to read on, this seems so interesting!

Okay, until next time (sorry this reviews so short, I just have to go, so I can't really keep going sorry!)

-Charley. xx




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Thu Aug 15, 2013 12:34 pm
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I must admit, I love TCG way. The way she treats her diary as a being is refreshing, simple and pleasant.

I am Kitty. That's not my real name of course, but my name is Kitty. I shall first introduce myself so you know me better.

~ Hello, Kitty. Where's the introduction though? From my point of view introducing yourself means telling your name. "Telling people (or in this case a diary) about your self" is a totally different thing.

What am I saying?! I'm writing in this notebook like it's an actual living thing. I always knew I was going crazy.

I suggest you put this one at the end of the text. "What am I doing? I'm writing in this notebook like it's an actual living thing. I always knew I was going crazy. Not that coming to school with cat gloves was a sign of mental sanity, but expecting to have a conversation with my own diary is a whole new level of crazy."

One day after a crazy school day she handed me this notebook that I'm writing in now.

You switch from "talking" with the diary to considering it just a notebook. I would change this phrase with: "One day, crazy school day, she handed me this notebook, she handed me ...you."

know it's crazy! I've begged my parents for years but they always said no.

~ Why not? Allergies, not cat-people, afraid that their precious couch will fall victim to the murderous claws of a evil cat?

Cute character. I'm off to the second part.


--Dante--




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Thanks a lot!



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I love the writing pattern that you used for this piece of writing. The reason is because I recently read "The Perks Of Being A Wallflower and this is using the same kind of scheme. And mind me that was one of my favorite books ;) also another thing I love about this story is that it attracts young readers like myself. I feel like I could connect to this person because my mother told me the same thing but I don't obsess over cats! Anyway, this lets us know more about the way the text is written and less about what the text is actually about. To elaborate more, this first part of the story shows us that the rest of the story will be written like a diary entry but what will the entry be about? That's one thing you should work on. Mind me, I loved the descriptive way you wrote this (especially with describing the diary) but maybe people would like it more if you gave us more of a hint of what the next chapter is about. But I honestly think that this is an amazing head start! I hope you take my advice and I would love to see what this cat obsessed girl writes next ;) -Richelle <3 bye!




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Thanks a lot!



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Sat Jun 22, 2013 4:57 am
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Wow, nice story, really cute too. I like how you are making a chapter book from just the entries in a diary, I love it! :D
Do, I trust this is a real diaryA. Of course no answer is needed, but I would still like to know. Really loved the story, and maybe I'll read the rest of it!
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It's not a true diary. Personally, I hate cats.



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from the begining i wanted some work which i feel from my heart and ur work is like this only. i like ur work.

[Whatever, let me say that I never thought I would be writing in here. My oh-so-wonderful mom thought that I needed a diary to write in. One day after a crazy school day she handed me this notebook that I'm writing in now. Just so you know, you are a brown leather bound notebook with 200 lined pieces of paper. There's also a little red ribbon bookmark attached to you so I know what page I left off. Now let me get back to the story on how I got you. I told my mom that I don't need one but she kept on insisting that it would help. "It would help you with your feelings. I know from experience." she said. I rolled my eyes, "I don't need help with them mom." My mom kept on telling me to use it and in the end, like always, she won and I had to write in a diary.
]


some more para which i liked are:

[I am a cat fanatic. I love cats to death and always will. Everything I own has to have a cat on it, even my shoes. One time in fifth grade I wore cat gloves for a year. Yup, that's how crazy I am about cats. At school they call me The Cat Girl. I kind of like the name, it defines who I am. However, the worst thing out of all this is that I don't have a cat. I, The Cat Girl don't have a cat. I know it's crazy! I've begged my parents for years but they always said no. I had many fantasies about having a cat though. He (yes a he) would be named Sir Whiskers the Great and he would wear red and yellow scarf everyday. Don't ask about the scarf, wait a minute how would you? Anyways....
I hear my mom calling me for dinner so I shall talk to you later!
]




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Thu Jun 20, 2013 10:01 am
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hey there A BOY From the Future is here for his short review of this precious work--
I would divide this review into few parts:-
1.) Grammar:- I could not find any grammar mistake that is really amazing.
2.) Plot :- The plot is really very sweet and interesting.I really like it from heart.
3.) Word Flow :- The words are flowing with the story so no problem with that also.
4.) Overall :- Overall I like this story and am impressed by your writing style. I'd like to see more from your side. I want to know more about the Cat Girl. I hope you continue this story.
All the best.Keep up the good writing.

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Wed Jun 19, 2013 10:48 pm
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Wow, this is quite a fun diary to read. Although I feel sorta guilty for peeking into the cat girl's personal stuff. Your narration is very clear and easy to read, and also picture. I could picture this girl with a head band that has cat ears sticking out at both sides, probably a hello kitty shaped school bag. And the funniest part about her is that she doesn't have a cat and how she goes on talking about her fantasies of having one, even named it and chose a perfect colored scarf for it. Very creative and lively ideas, I loved reading it and it made me smile for the first time today after having a very bad day. I really like the name Kitty, btw.

(And I haven't actually read the previous reviews you got so if I repeat something that they've already said then ignore it)

However, I really wished this chapter were longer. Are you going to add a chap 2 as well? If so then please do wall post me. I'd love to read it. Keep it up! =D




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Heya! I've got a review for this!

The first thing I wanna say is: LOL!
This was hilarious. It was funny, but at the same time it was possible to see that you're actually a very talented writer. I was blown away... I'm new here, but I do believe this may be the funniest piece of fiction I've read on this site so far.

It was really strange, because I actually identified with Kitty, kinda. I totally got her and she was very believable. Kitty is the strongest aspect of the story, and she is meant to be since the entire diary is going to be narrated in her voice. So kudos to you on your excellent characterization of her.

I've always found it difficult to write pieces that are funny, so I have tons of respect for writers, like yourself who're good with humour.

Do keep writing, I really liked it. I do hope she gets "Sir Whiskers the Great" :-)




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Wed Jun 19, 2013 9:35 pm
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This is interesting, in a good way! I think the strongest thing you have going for you here with this story is your character, obviously. She is a very likable who is easy to get used to. I like the self-deprecating humor in the beginning. I thought the transition from the section about her mom to describing herself was a little rough, but nothing too serious. I loved reading about her quirky personality! However, I do think you could have described better exactly why she loves cats so much. Other than those things, I think you have a good and funny story on your hands! Never stop writing!





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