Young Writers Society

Wow. That was astonishing to read, which is a great accomplishment really. I don't mean that in the sense that I'm some sort of literary snob or anything, but I find that I'm very judgmental of poetry and I come to conclusions quickly about people based on how well they write and portray poetry. Your poem is just amazing to me.
I wanted to say that the beginning drew me in and created a sense of surrealism that matched the theme of the poem perfectly. The description is not overtly displayed and the ease with which you write only helped to accentuate the tone that I perceived. Something that really caught my eye, however, was how often the speaker of the poem had to explain and expand on the thoughts they had about where they found themselves in the dream and the people they interacted with.
Of course, the ending left me breathless. I especially loved the second to last line: "...we don't admire the infinite potentials of a wide white frame..." and I have a feeling it's because it's vague and nothing in it is concrete. Also, hats off to you for ending on the perfect word.

I find this poem absolutely amazing. Although, it is a little difficult to read, I feel the meaning of it. I don't find it weird, I find it interesting. I hope to see many more poems from you, as this was one of the best I have read!

Hello there here is a Jordin with a review hahaha I will defeat this beautiful but viscus poem I hope that it helps.

Well it is kind of hard to read I think, by the time I was at the end I got the beginning all mixed but anyways I can read it over OK good I think this is strange seeing as I don't have a good vocabulary some of the words don't make any sense to me but I can use the context.

Next here what do you mean by (I think he said something of dimensions – of lines,) but maybe its just me.

Nice I liked this here it was a bit weird granted but interesting.

Good work no really good work I would like to see more of you work.

Keep writing and good luck.

Until later good bye and all the best.

~Jon~

This work ends on a very strong note, in my opinion. The last stanza brings a paradox to mind - the destruction inherent in creation. I think to myself that I should be mindful of what I'm doing destructively when acting on creative impulses. If it were my work, I would take out the first "No," in the last stanza, so that they all start with I. Maybe that's just a bit of my CDO tendencies poking through, but to me, an "I" statement is more powerful than a negation.
Overall, this is a piece I enjoy. Thought-provoking best describes my reaction to it. Thank you for posting this and good luck this April!
-Flutter