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Two children sat watching the tides crash against the old cliff. The girl’s snow white hair billowed in breeze, it used to be brown. The boy next to her had raven black hair, long and messy from years of city life. Smiles lit their dirty faces, it was a miracle that despite their lives of poverty and struggle to survive they could still smile.
Hmm, well that is a pretty relaxed start there for a prologue to have there, just two people sitting down and watching the world go bye there almost. I love the hints at their backstory there from the mentions of poverty, that does make this a lot more interesting of a start right here.
"Aria, how is your medicine supply? You aren’t taking too much of it are you?” It was always like Derin to worry about her. Ever since she had been caught and poisoned by a Gardilla Beast her health had been wavering, some days were worse than others, but at least she had survived the poisoning.
Okay, well now it really is starting to heat up nicely there, we've got mentions of beasts and poisonings and well, we get the sense that there's certainly a lot more happening than just relaxing and watching the tide. And we get a sense of the kind of relationship the these two people share as well, so that also adds a nice extra layer of things here which is also nice to see.
"It’s perfectly fine Derin. There's really nothin' to worry about, all we need to focus on is having enough food.” Her smile didn’t reach her eyes, and she knew that he saw it. Despite the doubt in her heart she laughed. “Come on! Ya gotta learn to lighten up for once. Just enjoy life while ya still can.”
Hmm, from that we're certainly getting a good look at the sort of personalities we've got going too here. You can see that one of them is the more serious whereas the other one appears to be a bit more laid back. The mentions of the whole having to secure food thing also adds a few stakes there cause we can see what sort of situation these folks are in here.
The sun had been a beautiful blend of pink and orange, just the perfect way to fall asleep. She just hadn’t realized how little time they still had.
Aaand, a lovely place to end things there, nice haunting message of things about to get horrible for everyone by the sound of it. At any rate, this was a pretty solid prologue here. This certainly sounds like a story that I'd read here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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