This wasn't a poem when I first starting writing it, and it's still not quite a poem. But it's not prose. I don't know where it fits, but I'm putting it here.
Am I the only one that hears the men in the ceiling,
walking with their heavy feet and steel shoes?
The plaster is cracking.
Am I the only one who hears?
Above the noise of broken sobs and anguished wails -
she was going to die one day -
can you hear?
Listen closer,
please.
I can't be crazy.
Can you hear the men?
When the ceiling caves in on our heads
will you see them then;
the men that walk above this morbid scene?
Should one land on her casket
would you then believe?
There are men in the ceiling.
Angels? Could it be?
If one of them brought her back to life
would you see -
I'm not crazy.
I can hear the men.
The ceiling's falling.
'Don't land on me.'
The plaster's raining down from the beams
placed high above this depressing gallery
of shawls and suits and black dresses of lace
and disgusting clothing that does nothing but hurt your eyes and -
God!
Can you hear them in the ceiling,
above all the crying?
She was dying anyway.
If they swooped down and took me away,
flew me to their nest and left me there to sleep -
just sleep -
would you then understand me?
Believe me.
There are men in the ceiling.
I can't be dreaming.
I don't remember ever sleeping...
Or closing my eyes,
my ears,
to this weeping.
Mom was going to die someday.
There are men in the ceiling.
I know I can't be imagining.
The noise is too real for this not to be happening.
There are men in the ceiling.
And,
by God,
they're screaming.
No, I'm not dreaming.
I'm not insane.
The ending was "I'm not crazy" but I changed it. Still not too sure about the change though. Which one works better in your opinion?
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