This is what I first wonder about this poem: why is the listener miles away? That gives him a physical presence. What, in your subconscious, separated the land where this mother and child lives from where the physical presence of this prayer-listener is? That is something that is burning me up with curiosity, and I hope you think about it a little and experiment, because that kind of delineation would be something new and vivid.
Now, aside from that, I'm wondering why this poem was more than one stanza. It seems it can be condensed. The same distance that you mention in stanza two can be the distance across the sea they travel. That way you can condense those two ideas into the introduction of one stanza. The fact of the matter is, the pleas are actually pretty identical: keep them safe, keep them safe, keep them safe. You don't say anything distinguishing to say what he should keep them safe from, except for the specific mention of a pestilence in the first stanza, which I might assume to be your main concern. If it is, I would say that deserves development, not the idea of a plea. It's clear: it's a prayer, they are asking for safety. To be interesting as a poem, we want to know what they need to be safe from.
I hope these ideas will be helpful to you in your editing process. If you have any questions or comments for me about my review, let me know in a PM or on my wall, please!
Good luck and keep writing.
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