Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
''Val come sweetie time for your photo shoot'' 'que vien' I put on my shoesand headed into thephoto taking area, i was taking photos for my new album thatsgetting released next month called*standing threw the pain* the directorhad me sit on a stool with my shoes in my hand legs crossedand head on my knees looking depressed, once they took a couple of pictures they called in one of the male models he had to wrap his hand around my waste and i had to stand on my tippy toes with my arms around his neck while kissing him. while he was leaning in i pushed away "odio este sentimiento" (An-translated( i hate this feeling) i then ran out of the room and into my dressing room.
Well, this was an interesting little piece here...I'm guessing this is the very beginning here....aand, well it does feel like a single scene here...although I would say this is really short for something like a first chapter here, aaand it doesn't really seem to be something that would quite fit for a prologue. Soo...this is an interesting piece that's kind of middle of that. I think perhaps you need to make this scene just a little bit longer and flesh out more and then it could stand alone as the first chapter of a story here...otherwise it just reads a little bit too abruptly this one.
That aside though, I like the premise that you have here. The title of this was certainly quite interesting, and this scene almost seems to be hinting at something to do with the title there. It does make you ask a few questions this one, and that is pretty good to see at the start, cause you do wonder what sort of photoshoot is going on here and why this person became as uncomfortable as they did here. At any rate, this seems like a pretty decent start overall, and it sounds like a story that I'd read here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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