Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
I always knew that I had something special in me, just didn't know what. I barely knew my parents, brother, or any kind of family. As long as I could remember I lived by myself for pretty much all of my life for about 20 years. I live in a trailer out by Chicago pier and a sexaholic. My home didn't consist of a lot of things. All it had was a fridge with a toaster in the back with one bed. I never really cleaned up the house so the place stinked pretty bad, clothes were torn throughout the trailer, not a single piece of carpet was left untouched. Make the wrong move and you would be swimming in a wormhole of some nasty shit.
Well, things off to a pretty terrible start by the looks of things there, well, terrible as in a terrible situation for the person that's narrating this to us...the start as far as the story goes, this is pretty decent here. You get a nice little background about the main character and the kind of situation that they are currently living. I do like the description that you've got here, its quite powerful and the fact that all of this is being said by the person who actually lives there shows you how bad it must be for the person themselves to acknowledge how terrible of a place to live it is.
I came home that day from my usual routine. I was a drug dealer on the streets but didn't use ant of it for myslf. The only reason that kept me moving from day to day was this old sword. I really didn't know what to do with it, I tried throwing away but it always came back to me. I'd consulted a doctor but all he said was that I was totally insane and I had a mental illness called.
Well, that completes the whole round of just terrible situations to be in for this person, although it does look like, despite all these horrible things around this person, they are still trying to be better here somehow and potentially only doing the whole drug dealing business to earn enough to survive. At any rate, this is a pretty interesting piece you've got here...seems like a character to follow there. So...this is a nice little start but that ending though...is genuinely just a sentence cut off halfway...so...yeah, that's on one hand going to make you want to read on more..but also it is not a very good ending there...you might wanna look into rewriting that one.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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