HI! i don't know the original of this song and I couldn't find it on Youtube so I'll just review this as lyrics unconnected to the- oh wait, i was searchiing for the chocolate song, not the painter song. found it!
these are quite funny lyrics! i think it would be funnier if i knew the song well, but they're good anyway. There's not a lot of content (the only really interesting line is whilst you were eating my nougat center) but there isn't in the original either!
ONe bit that I think needs some work:
We’d be there together,
Just like we used to be.
But differently, you wouldn’t know,
That I, could se.
I, could, see that, you were glad.
But everytime I try.
This whole bit doesn't really have anything to do with chocolate or, well, anything, and feels a bit too vague. I think you need to make it make more sense and be more to do with chocolate
I hope I've helped!
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