Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Happy Review Day! Let's see what we have here.
You did a great job with this essay. Quite inspiring, as a matter of fact. Though, I find (again) this essay to not be an essay but a speech. It would be the best speech for peace, if it were called a speech. If only there were an option in categorizing for speeches. XD You may have explained why I barely have any enemies. I always wondered why I would be friends with someone that my friends didn't like and I would find that, that person had made a mistake and my friends were stubborn and didn't want to forgive them. I am very forgiving(thanks to church) and if someone hits my funny bones(it's not funny), I may curse the world for a second and see that it was an accident. I truly believe in your philosophy in this essay. Your spelling and grammar is great. This always makes a piece of writing more enjoyable. Thank you for that. Your organization is pretty good. The story paragraph seems a bit big to me though, maybe break it up into a few pieces? That would make it not seem as overwhelming(if it ever did to anyone XD). I feel like you should quote where the legend was from, that would help me a little more to refer to it. Overall, great job with this piece. Have a nice review day. Keep calm and keep writing!
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