Young Writers Society

The start of the piece reminds me of “The Perks of being a Wallflower”. I think the letter style gives the piece a sense of mystery; this was one of the things I liked in the book “The Perks of being a Wallflower”.
I love the second paragraph it such a typical teenage thing to not feel normal because there’s no one they like or their crushing on, like their in some way not a proper teenager, I think it makes the story more relatable for people reading it. You also show a part of the process people feel when they’ve acknowledge the really like some one, the nervousness in the decision they’ve made but you looked at this in a different light, you looked at the way it would change you, people rarely look at this side they just look at the side of the nervousness of their character or how their character makes a fool of themselves in front of the person they like. You’ve given your readers a different perspective on the craziness involved in liking someone. You don’t completely give up the other side of the crush thing but you showed it skilfully not using too many clichés and not going into to much detail.
Your story suddenly takes a twist, taking an unexpected turn in one sentence “You were just having fun; toying around with my feelings”. I like the use of the comparison with the tide and how it waits for no one with the comparison of Dale the person your characters is writing to. It suggests that Dale as, to your character, was more than a crush he was almost the sun that she revolved around. The story takes another turn that changes the perspective of the reader again.

All in all I think it’s a good story and letter- wunmi.

You may want to clarify the name then, because that is not what I thought it was. And if it's not what I thought it was, then it's mot what most people are going to think either.

There's only one thing I didn't like, and it was named below. The "TACy" thing. Instead, maybe say "my name is really pronounced like 'Tacky'" or something along those lines.

But to the good things!!!

I absolutely LOVE how this is in letter format! It makes the story so unique, and i am obsessed with the writing style you chose XD

I enjoyed the voice of this piece, also. It was almost like the girl writing it was reading it out loud to me. Well done, there.

"How could I lie to myself about what I was?" Hmm, this opened a whole new closet full of ideas. What is she? I like writing that makes me think. And you accomplished that with this

She seems insecure with the way her name is pronounced. Thy's actually refreshing. Too many characters now a days are much too perfect and unflawed. Tacy isn't, and I like that about her.

That's about it as far as a review. I really really enjoyed this story/letter/thing

I look forward to reading more of your writing!

Hey there! Scarlet here, as you know It's review day.

You know what that means, time to review!

Nitpicks first...

Honestly.

Tacy? It’s actually TACy.

Unknown391625 here with a pleasing review!

I think this is an amazing short story. It would bring tears to some eyes. I love how you wrote this in a letter.

"Your Once-Upon-a Time-Admirer"

I love this line. The way you wrote it makes it sound very anonymous. As I said, amazing short story. Keep on writing!

-Unknown391625

Hello ConfusedGlasses,

This letter... It just brings tears to my eyes. It's so much like me, and yet, so different. I know people who have a crush on me, but that's not what I want, I just want to forget. To be normal again. Only three people know, and one got the idea that I should be sent to a lab. I do have an alibi, but that just stings. I could find no error in this letter.

~Kelpies