Hey again, Cynder! Wow, this installment is much shorter this time around.
I'll start by backing up Wolfie's first point. Just saying the pole is rather confusing, and I had assumed you mean something like a pool and it was just a typo. But then it became even more confusing when there was no previous mention of a pool, why would she do that and how is a pool desolate? XD Be more clear there.
Before I continue, a quick nitpick.
Just then, something remarkable happened.
So, this is one of those lines that will make readers groan and roll their eyes. Saying things like 'and then it happened!' do a lot more harm to the story than good. It's one quite a cliche line but also ruins the tensions and mystery that's starting to build, because instead if letting it just happen, you gave us a heads up. It's like being chased by a maniac and then whenever he is near, he walks up to you and gives you a slip of paper before hiding and trying to to scare you right after. You know he's there, so it doesn't work.
This also happened in the previous chapter, in the prologue I believe, so just watch out for spots like that. Give us the actions first and cut right to them. You want that shocking factor to be preserved so that we are pulled into the story and begging to see what happens next, eagerly turning pages.
Anyway, right after that line there's a slight intermission where the narrator comes in from the present and pulls us out of the story. Here, it doesn't feel necessary. It's more jarring and prevents us from being pulled in completely. I would recommend a better way to sprinkle that in so it's entrance doesn't stop anything and flows with the actions.
The prophecy at the end it really nice, but to me it doesn't read quite right. The second line doesn't have the beat of the first and it tripped me up a little bit. Perhaps go back and play around with the wording, adding/removing some while still keeping the same concept.
Overall, I'm very interested. So she's a shapeshifter, huh? Reminds me a lot if David Tenant from a book series about clay dragons that I read (the name slips my mind) and your interactions between the characters is really nice.
Sorry for the short review, but the part itself is also short ^^ Keep on Writing,
~Wolfare~
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