Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well...this is just one of those stories that make you go "Awww" and well that's it...its just such a cute and wholesome little story of two young children just having a fun day out in the lake.
Anyway let's get right to it,
One nice summer day I went to lake. "Are we there yet? Are we there yet?" "We are not there yet, Katya" said Mom.
Then we were finally there! "Hi Katya I really missed you so much." I said. "Me to" said Katia. There was snake close to lake said Katia.
Aww...well it seems like a pretty sweet little start there...well its got a little bit of confusion in the paragraphing that dialogue but considering how old you were when you wrote it, I think we can cut some slack here...xD...its just a really simple little concept here and it makes for a nice little opening paragraph here.
"Maybe it can't swim." I said. When me and Katia went into the water I learned how to do a underwater handstand. Then we rode the water morcilyee it could float. It went fast!
Then I wanted to make a sandcastle. So we needed rocks, water, sand, and some shovels and pails.
Ooooh...okay...these seem like a lovely series of memories from a trip the lake. This is definitely stirring up all that nostalgia and doing it very well, the pacing here is a bit on the fast side but again that's not a big issue considering when it was written...and well its just managing to put a constant smile on my face as I read and that is the best part of it.
Then I asked "Can we fly our kite". No later" said mom. "O.K." I said.
Then we had a little sand castle. Later on it was bigger but Katia had to stay in the tent.
Then it was lunch time. Everything was yummy. Then I said time to fly my kite.
Oooh...that does sound like an awesome day, building a sandcastle and then having food by the lake before going to fly a kite...ahhh this is just digging up far too much nostalgia for it to be healthy at this point...especially considering we're in a time where that's totally impossible at the moment.
I tried to make it fly but the kite couldn't fly. So I guessed that we sould do it at the park.
Then me and Katia prented to drink tea but we didn't. Then I dressed up. After that we saw the snake swim in the lake. I was so surpized! Then me and Katya collected seashells.
We put them in my brothers pockect. Then. I had to say bye! Bye! Katia I said. Bye said Katia. Then we left home.
Well, that seems like a perfectly lovely day out between two really good friends...and honestly that's it I suppose...but well..that's all you want too I guess...its definitely a really wholesome little short story this one.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this story managed to do the very important job of leaving me with a big smile on my face and that really is all you can ask from it
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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