Young Writers Society

Hey IAmAHuman! Alex here to review your haikus!
I'll review this in a similar format to fictional as in one haiku to a section!
Tears
I really liked this one. Simple and short but deep and meaningful. I can see many meanings to that so I don't really know which is the intended one but that's good! Keeps the reader thinking!
Not really anything to improve there!
Cherry blossom tree
I really loved the tranquillity of this one! You really captured the nature of falling blossoms!
Not much to improve here either although a comma I think is needed between "Twisting" and "Swirling".
Vampires
I'm not entirely sure about this one, the "Creatures of the night" and "Lurking in the shadows" is a little bit cliché. I think maybe you could think of something else based on all your other ones. Sure the current fits the Vampire creature but meh.
The mask
This one was interesting! I really like how you described someone who hides themselves or pretends to be someone their not. I really loved the metaphor "Her eyes a mirror" as it means that they have got so good at becoming a mask that they can even hide their feelings through their eyes. Very well done!
Perfection
This one is interesting! I like how it is a little riddle! Personally I believe that it is a delusion that keeps us working which is also what this haiku was trying to imply by showing both obvious sides. Nicely executed! Just one small improvement and that is that "What is perfection" Needs a question mark.
Mourning wolf
I really like the second line and the question at the end of this haiku. The "haunting cry" really fits the howl of a wolf and how unnerving it can be and the question at the end really ties it off very well! Not much wrong with this! I can really imagine this to be in some sort of ancient poem; that's how eerie and amazing it is!

Overall
Although this took ages to review I really loved your haikus! You show a very original style that really comes into play in a haiku! See ya! *drops like*

Hai! (ha...see what I did there? Hai...ku.)

Anyway...I found this to be rather intriguing. My favorite poem, overall, was "The Mask".

I liked your use of "thirsting" in the one about vampires - haven't heard it used that way before. Nouns converted into verbs make for an interesting wording.

In that poem (vampires), I do feel like there could be a better word for hiding. Lurking, maybe.

Tears

I like the premise of it - it's quite beautiful - but I feel like the word "combining" is too musty and precise and scientific-sounding to fit the tone of the poem. I know there's a set number of syllables and all, but consider finding a better word/phrase. Some examples: colliding, cascading, still flying

Cherry Blossom Tree

You don't really need the comma after "swirling".

Sad Wolf

There should be a comma after "sad" to better the flow.
Again, it's hard with the format and all, but..."sad" just seems like a word that barely brushes the surface of what you're trying to express in the poem. There's more than sadness present in that wolf, it seems. And sadness is more than just...being sad. I don't really know what I'm saying - if you understand me, you're a linguistic prodigy!

Anyway...overall this is very, very good for 35 minutes and taking into consideration the syllable-formatting and everything of that nature. Take my suggestions if you wish.

Keep writing (not that you'd stop)!