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ideal place to act out the dramas of their minds
Words to describe her feelings could not be found.
or any emotion at all
“I don’t like this place, Fred. I can hear the bell ringing,”
Before it’s too late.
facial expression showing anger
One day, Brenna, you may need to run like the wind, she told herself.
The mud and leaves were softening as rivulets formed and that made the children slip.
self-projected shield
Myth wrote:There was nothing strange about two children walking down a road. Behind them were the tops of trees and a few chimneys, in the far distance was a clock tower—it struck twice to denote the time—and the air was warm and rich with the fragrance of honeysuckle and freshly cut grass.
The girl was Brenna Tandy. At eleven she was taller than most girls her age. She had long dark curls and an upturned nose and, as usual, she was frowning—wondering why it was taking so long to reach their destination.
Myth wrote:Brenna and her friend, Frederick Norman, were on their way to an abandoned playfield. The open space was no longer in use by the other local children, and so it served as the perfect place to practise rounders, run up and down the slopes bordering the field, play pirates on a makeshift wooden boat or climb trees.
Fred, a step ahead with hands in pockets, was whistling as his eyes followed the faint cracks on the road. Although he was a year older, Fred shared the same wild imagination—therefore the playfield was an ideal place to act out the dramas of their minds.
Myth wrote:“I reckon my ancestors were Normans,” Fred said, waiting for her to catch up with him
Myth wrote:“Maybe.” There was a brief pause. “Oh, I just wish I didn’t have to visit the cousins, but my parents are going to be busy as usual.” Brenna sighed heavily.
suggestion wrote:“Maybe.” There was a brief pause. “Oh, I just wish I didn’t have to visit the cousins. But my parents are going to be busy[...] as usual.”
[paragraph?] Brenna sighed heavily.
Myth wrote:Brenna pulled a face. How could anyone eat a snail? They were slimy [and did not have a chance to escape], [s]they were far too slow[/s]; she [ only? ] hoped the cousins would not see her squirm.
Myth wrote:Brenna focused on the road ahead. There was a hazy cloud hovering in the air and, shivering from a cold vibration, she halted.
Brenna focused on the road ahead. [s]There was[/s] A hazy cloud hovered in the air; shivering from a [the?] cold vibration, she halted.
Myth wrote:Words to describe her feelings could not be found. The bees continued their unified humming.
Myth wrote:Light played on the swarm, lighting up each bee and the buzzing increased to a point where the two friends had to cover their ears. Abruptly, the bees turned into dust particles, and, [s]were[/s] picked up by a wind, [comma] [s]and[/s] all traces of their existence vanished.
Myth wrote:Twisted black trees, with branches extending upwards and outwards, grew rapidly along the lane. Rust coloured leaves fell swiftly and turned to grey ash when settling on the ground. The familiar bushes and oak trees were disappearing, as if Time was pushing itself forward, to be replaced by a dead meadow—wild and festooned with burnt bushes and wilting flowers. A tree rose above their heads, creaking from a non-existent breeze and swished its branches, creating a whispering sound.
Myth wrote:Their surrounding was no longer recognisable. Brenna and Fred stared at one another, uncertain whether to be shocked or marvelled or any emotion at all. How could a place change so quickly without having an affect on them?
Myth wrote:Brenna and Fred stared at one another, uncertain whether to be shocked or to marvel[s]led or any emotion at all.[/s]
Myth wrote:How could a place change so quickly without having an affect on them?
Myth wrote:Naturally, the first to recover was Brenna.
or even...suggestion wrote:Naturally, Brenna recovered first.
suggestion wrote: Naturally, Brenna was first to recover.
Myth wrote: She had always been aware of unusual goings-on, though reasons behind this bizarre power were never revealed to her—some would have called it a psychic ability. She was never too thrilled about her magical power. Usually the end results meant Brenna would get in trouble after trying to elucidate why she left faeries a bowl of milk on the doorstep.
suggestion wrote: She had always been aware of the unusual - though why, she didn't know. Some would have called it psychic [ what does Brenna think of that idea? ] As far as she knew, it only ever caused trouble - like the end results of trying to elucidate why she left a bowl of milk on the doorstep for faeries.
Myth wrote:Fred looked to her for an explanation. “What do you think of this? Is it, you know, your ‘magic’?” he asked.
Myth wrote:“I’m not doing anything. I just see things, not make them happen.”
A branch poked at Brenna. It seemed to point to a sign nailed to a nearby tree. Brenna, conscious of the swaying trees, found a cricket perched on top of the sign but the painted black letters were unknown to her. The cricket chirped and the words began to swim, [s]they[/s] rearranged themselves and, at one point, it was almost legible—Brenna recognised words such as ‘king’ and ‘alight’—yet when she looked for a second time the writing was alien once more.
Myth wrote:This was not true. A bell often rang in Brenna’s mind when danger was approaching but, at that moment, there was only silence. [s]She was using her human instinct to prevent anything from happening[/s]. She hoped Fred was not aware of her lie.
Myth wrote:Fred stood rooted in place, staring—in disbelief—at the sign as the cricket chirped again. Was her friend able to read the words? [ could he read them/the word? ]
“Let’s go,” she said, feeling uneasy and taking a hold of Fred’s arm.
Myth wrote:It was suddenly very chilly. Though the sun [s]was shining[/s] shone? [s]and the temperature was increasing[/s], she felt the cold creeping up behind her. The aura of the place was filled with a turbulence of pain and suffering and, looking around desperately, Brenna could see no way to leave—the road appeared to go on forever in both directions
Myth wrote:Whether he was right or wrong, Brenna did not care. She shrieked as something touched the back of her neck. Fred ignored her discomfort—he was too taken up [s]by[/s] with? the trees to notice her glare furiously at him. What made him think this was the very Road his grandfather had made up?
Myth wrote:He spun around to face her, [s]facial[/s] expression showing anger. “I know you don’t believe me, but I’ll show you. Just because you happen to have magical powers and all that, doesn’t mean I can’t go on an adventure.”
Myth wrote:With that, he ran off up the road, his wild hair waving. Brenna groaned—Don’t make me regret this Fred.
Myth wrote: Birds flitted angrily into the air as Fred whooped with joy, Brenna was surprised birds were even roosting in such a horrid place where other [s]life forms[/s] [ creatures? ] did not exist.
Myth wrote:“Hurry for what exactly?” Brenna mumbled.
Myth wrote:At last the path came to an abrupt stop. It was now a stump, partially covered by fallen leaves and dried mud. There was a shimmering curtain to separate the path from whatever was further on and it wavered with motion.
suggestion wrote:A shimmering curtain fell to separate the path from whatever was further on and it wavered with motion.
Myth wrote:A stray branch tapped the curtain, and the slow ripples spreading across the delicate fabric seemed to grip[s]ped[/s] Fred. “It’s so ...” he broke off.
Myth wrote:Everything beyond the curtain was in shadows. Nothing could be made out, but Brenna sensed life there. She moved forward to hold Fred’s arm, feeling his warm flesh [ skin? ] underneath, and stood close to him.
Myth wrote:There was an inaudible conversation between the owner of the light and others.
Myth wrote:Brenna’s head began to hurt as the incessant bell began to ring, [ the ]magic [s]was[/s] warning her but she had no idea what to do.
Myth wrote:Someone hushed the excited gabber. Close-by was the splashing of feet, enthusiastic chatter erupted and three blue lanterns lit [s]up[/s]
Myth wrote:In all the stories Fred’s grandfather had told, he warned them of goblins, creatures that were not always friendly and known to kidnap children.
suggestion wrote:In all the stories Fred’s grandfather had told, he warned them of goblins: kidnapping children, known as sneaks, liars.
Myth wrote:“Get off me, Fred!” she said and fingered her bruise.
Myth wrote:The creature was almost as tall as Brenna. A loincloth covered the groin from which hung a grey pouch. The creature grabbed a handful of purple dust and lifted its hand to its lips and blew gently. A light wisp rose and floated above the goblin’s head and, instructed by a single command, the wisp aimed for Brenna.
Myth wrote:“Climb the trees!” She said, thinking quickly.
Myth wrote:Having been distracted by the trees, the goblin [ now ] sneered. The purple, vapoury powder was deployed once more
suggestion wrote:Brenna’s knees gave way and she collapsed, [s]she[/s] too [s]was[/s] tired, [s]and[/s] her vision doubl[s]ed[/s]ing
Myth wrote:“We won’t be seeing you again.”
-Lloyd Alexander"There is adventure in simply being among those we love, and among the things we love -- and beauty, too."
Brenna dyed her hair, refusing to revert to the original dark brown it had once been—presently it was in shades of green with turquoise.
“For crying out loud, Brenna, you’re not a mermaid!” her mother had retorted.
“Merrow,” Brenna corrected. She had then ran fingers through the newly dyed hair, wondering whether anyone would ever know that mermaids did not exist—she had never seen any, and a merrow had assured her too.
At Mew Lane, the neighbours gave Brenna contemptuous looks, hoping she would not approach them or invite a rowdy group of friends to the area. They paid no attention to her when she greeted them.
The only other things Brenna required were art supplies. Her room was filled with portfolios and work in progress. One corner dedicated to the art world with books of all shapes and sizes, various paint boxes and equipments, a certificate for a contest entry and photographs of the pieces she sold to private clients—some were her father’s colleagues but Brenna did not inform Mr Tandy in fear of losing her work.
In her room, Brenna took out her clarinet. She kept it in a black box under her bed, the plush blue interior was soft to touch and she smiled as her fingers ran along the trimmed edge. Brenna admired the black shape and tested the notes, her fingers pressing the silver keywork lightly.
Mozart’s ‘Clarinet Concerto’ played in the background. She joined in, knowing—from memory—every note. It was a piece she had performed as a solo act at the school music concert. Although she had not won Brenna was satisfied, music made her happy, calmed her like nothing else could.
Music is my soul.
Long ago she had considered herself to be different from other people. It was not decided in a day. Brenna had spent an awful amount of time thinking and ended up with headaches on a few occasions—in her childhood days she had always frowned while browsing her mind—and finally she discovered a method to combine music with her supernatural ability.
Why was she the only one to remember him? The Normans denied having a son, or any child, and when Brenna had burst into their house—in order to prove them wrong—she found everything different: Fred’s belongings vanished, as if there had never been a boy living at Number Forty-Three.
A winged creature sat, with its back to her, on the table. It was putting together broken glass from one of the windows. Brenna guessed it must have accelerated when landing and watched the creature repair the damage, and then transport it—in the blink of an eye—back into place.
Quite impressive, she thought, admiring the creature’s handiwork.
Brenna was shocked by the creature’s address. “You know my name?” She blushed, embarrassed by what she had just asked—if it knew she was there, surly it knew a simple thing like her name.
The skin was in mosaic colours of blue, the eyes large and grey and tufts of black hair grew on top of its smooth head, and—like other similar creatures—it wore a loincloth.
“I’m not a gargoyle but an imp—one of the species that make up the Hob creatures,”
The imp made no reply, as if the answers to both questions could be a no or a yes. “I only came to tell you that the Road has returned. This time you’re to go through to Trun,”
The imp watched as she gathered herself. She was not sure what to do at first, the imp had said to hurry but how long was she to be away for? Should she actually go along with the creature and not take food and drink?
“Are you going with me?” she asked from the hallway. Her parents were out, leaving a hurried note crawled on the jotter. She tore it off and wrote her own message:
Gone out. Back soon,
Brenna
“Does this person have a name?”
Again, no answer.
Brenna was no longer existed in the Tandy household.
Downstairs, pictures and trophies melted into nothing. The imp closed the door. Rain did not bother it as a shield protected him. “Go, create new memories,”
Remaining red crystals glowed, taking flight into the air, already replacing the life of Brenna Tandy. The note from her parents burned away. Brenna’s writing was wiped.
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