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Two Doves



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Sun Jan 15, 2012 3:49 am
lrrussell330 says...



One day I saw two doves,
the male was expressing his love.
But the female just flew away
the male was left to sorrow another day.

The next day and the next day
Then, I saw a most horrific sight
there, on my window sill, stood just one dove
All alone with no other dove to love

I don't want us to be those doves
I don't want you to reject my love
I don't want to expect to see you
and then you never come through
So I have something I need to say that i hope you do too
all I have to say is that I love you
  





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Mon Jan 16, 2012 12:37 am
tgirly says...



I think it could have a better rythm, but I really like the message and I feel sorry for the job, so nice job. Sorry I don't really have much to say other than that, hope this helps.
When I was young, I admired clever people. Now that I am old, I admire kind people.
-Abraham Joshua Heschel
  








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