Young Writers Society

This house is so lonely,
So empty,
So void.
Loss of emotion,
A Family destroyed.


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I know it's short, I might create a bigger poem around it one day, but for now, I love it.

I like it! You have a gift VERY few people can create a poem so short, yet with such emotion to it. High five for you! (and a cookie) I see you're new around here; Welcome, welcome! We're very friendly folk; shoot me a message if you need help, or a review, or a friend! I look forward to more of your work =)

~The Scratt

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Nice! Very short, yes, but in a way it adds to the overally effect - in some ways grief can be very simple - I look forward to seeing more from you!

So much meaning in such a short poem.
There is some few topics whose better not to broaden about it.

Good job!

Very deep in meaning for such a short poem. I am obsessed with poems like this, keep up the good work!

I have never seen a poem as short as this one, but it captures so much emotion in it. You can tell RIGHT away what the speaker feels just of the description he/she is describing. I like it. I'm going to be looking forward to some of your future works!

I love this. You can so easily tell when someone has talent when they create such a short poem with so much emotion packed into it. I've always been obsessed with these kinds of poems, so great job! The only thing I noticed that you can change (if you want, of course) is you used a semicolon where it probably would have been better to just use a comma. Semicolons are much easier to see than commas and can sometimes distract from the actual poem itself. The poem is awesome as it is, but if you wanted to make it better then replacing the semicolon with a comma would work! Amazing, amazing job here! I really would like to see more poems like this from you! Keep writing!

Rachael :D

Wow. That is how to write a poem. For something so short, that really packs a punch. I would be the first to point out that I know absolutely squit about poetry, but wherever this came from inside you, keep tapping into it. Thank you for sharing this!

Very short yet very powerful. It's great! I mean it. I loved how a one-stanza poem can have a very big meaning.

I can feel every emotion on it.

Wow. I love this! It's so short, but the emotional impact is amazing... this is talent!
Two thumbs up!
Oh, and welcome to YWS! You'll love it here, I can assure you
Keep up the great work!
~ AmiiLightwood =)

I like this poem. It's short but it's quite emotional, like everyone has said.

Loss of emotion - This part would make more sense with A before it. "A loss of emotion". I don't know, just the words "Loss of emotion" don't make as much grammatical sense.

Otherwise, you clearly have a talent for the short ones. Keep on writing.

Even though this is the shortest poem I've ever read, I love the straightforward message. It leaves the rest to the imagination without having to guess what will happen. Great writing.. I loved it!