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Lord, Let It Rain



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Tue Nov 08, 2005 8:18 am
Snoink says...



Lord, let it rain.

Let it rain upon my tearful face
So both our tears can slide together
And become one.
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

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Tue Nov 08, 2005 10:54 pm
Once Upon A Dream says...



I like this! I have a bunch of poems like this as well, so I understand the reason behind the short, simple verse. Clean, clear emotion, simple but deep and very nice.





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Fri Nov 11, 2005 12:08 am
backgroundbob says...



Yes, I like it as well, though only as a change from the normal: too many would make me bored of them

not a lot of criticism can be offered, can it? :)
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Fri Nov 11, 2005 6:08 am
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It's too short for criticism, lol. :P
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

Moth and Myth <- My comic! :D








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