Young Writers Society

Far too long I lived a lie
Believing in whatever was served to me
Denying what I pleased

Now, I know the truth within me
And I know what's behind me
You are

You are the one who showed me myself
and you are the one who I can trust
And sometimes I can be dramatic
and spill out tears, saying I am sad
Wanted to believe I'm sad, but no,
You make me dig deeper into myself
To find what I truly felt
And in the end, I knew it wasn't sadness
I felt it wasn't sadness, it was something different

How could this happen to me?
Why have I never tried to know how I felt?
Why... why did I lie to myself
While I was completely honest to you?

I can tell you one truth:
After living in a far too naive and shallow life
I don't have to trick myself into feeling this
Openly I can say it, and I can't care less who sees
I love you.

edicated to My Greatest Friend (the One sounded kind of creepy to me. Sorry):

Wow....I feel the emotion there, TBR--very well done--beautiful and powerful in its own way.

Lovely. Whoever its for I can tell you mean it dearly.

Very, very beautiful.

Reminds me of two of my poems.. This is wonderful.

It's sweet, or something more than sweet. I like it.

I can tell you one truth:
After living in a far too naive and shallow life
I don't have to trick myself into feeling this
Openly I can say it, and I can't care less who sees
I love you.

I like that ending. .

Hmmm ... well, I know you want me to kill it, but poetry's not my best subject, and there aren't any flaws I can see with my un-trained eye, so Well Done!

Pretty.

What is it with you and your untitle poems being so great? Put a title to this (as well as the other untitled one...).

It's very well written, full of obvious emotion and feeling for this person, who you have opened yourself to, when you couldn't anyone else? Yes? No?

Anway, I can't see anything in particular I would change, so carry on!

--Q

And sometimes I can be dramatic
and spill out tears, saying I am sad
Wanted to believe I'm sad, but no,
You make me dig deeper into myself
To find what I truly felt

My favourite parts. What a lovely poem.

Thank you
Now, I must go, for Geometry class is now.
Aye....-

Wonderful poem. This is full of love and emotion, and I really like it.

Good work!