Young Writers Society

And now i Sit and Wonder
And Allow my mind to wander
A thought provoking warmth-
This will be release-
To be at ease
To relieve the pressure
Building
Growing
From the inside
Warmth is what is seek
What i must be seeking
For there can be no other explanation
To seek
A place to crawl into
A space of heat
With another
With reason
With meaning
For now this temporary warmth will be substitute
But the procelin loses heat quickly
But for now it will encompace
Surround
Embrace
But as one well knows
Eventually
Given time
The warmth will fade
So now i must rouse myself
Back from the brink
To make a decision
How long will a temporary substitue do?
At what point will I
Will we
Will YOUSet out and find your warm and happy place?
For we are all masochist
In some way shape or form
We must all decide
What moment will move us to find it?
That palce we seeek
But when we find it will it be too late?
Will we just Curl up in this warm water and die?
Fetal position to enter and to leave
FUCKING SET OUT NOW!
Dont let this temporary psudo-warmth sedate us
Sedate our hunger for the real thing
MOVE!
Find it
The warmth you seek
MOVE![b]

OHHH! I liked this!! So emotional. A couple of things:

Warmth is what is seek

I didn't get this line. It didn't make sense. Is it meant to be

Warmth is what I seek?

I don't know. Maybe it's just a typo.

What i must be seeking

You need to capatilize your "i". I say that to people a lot

That palce we seeek

You spelt place wrong and you only need two "e"s in seek.

So now i must rouse myself

Capitilize your "i"s again

You should go over your work before you post it. It sounds so much better if you do. Well done with this!!

~Lollipop~

Just for the record, this was my brother. He probably won't ever post again, but, whatever. Yeah, sometimes I agree with him, sometimes I don't. He can be a real hypocrite, and then be really philosophical and smart. Not that those are opposites, I'm just sayin'.

dont be an ass, perfection is for those who have too much free time, imperfection is beautiful, god thought, so thats why he made you such an jerk off- to insure that you wouldnt be perfect and therefore beautiful