Young Writers Society

Freeze Frame
Hold it right here
Don't push play just yet
Let's just sit here a moment
Let's just wait a moment

Freeze Frame
It's good right here
Everything's perfect right now
Let's just stop for a moment
Let's just be for a moment

Because right here
Right now
Everything's okay
Nobody's talking
Nobody's watching
Nobody's ruining this for us
It's just the two of us
Freeze Frame

Freeze Frame
Leave it right here
Don't make us move on
Let's just smile for a moment
Let's just sit for a moment

Freeze Frame

This to me sounded like a song. And a good song at that. Perhaps it was the repetiton that brought me to that conclusion. Although, saying that, I thorughly enjoyed reading this. It was so simple...it just put into words the capturing of that unforgettable moment, that special time you always want to stay with you, and I was touched, truly. I don't have an crit, because it doesn't seem the sort of poem you can just change like that, you've described exactly what it feels like.

This sounded like a song to me too, a very nice song too. It seems like a better song then poem actually. But it was very nice.