Jester

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A fevered dream, a rapid hope.
A moonbeam through a telescope,
So fragile now it comes and goes.
I'll keep my staggering, drunken throes.

A string of words, a simple sin
narrated from the bottle-bin.
I'll lie in stupor, the memories flash.
Quite blown away, a cloud of ash.
A gossip prates "Oh how obscene!"
I'll keep my drags of nicotine.

"That stupid bitch" the half hearts moan.
"I need someone to call my own!" they'll cry.
But soundless nods, my only gift to offer.
I'll keep my steady silent drift.

"You're way too funny, too slick to think,
about pounding mattress springs!"

My reply...

"Stick around, pass me a drink.
I'll show you how sad Jesters sing..."




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that is so cool I love this it's the best it makes me cheerful and happy keep this up




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There's seriously been some awesome writing on this site lately. This was definitely not an exception to it. This was really, really cool. Grr, I hate short and pointless comments rather than legitimate reviews, but I just can't find anything to complain about. This was air-tight grammar-wise, and the same goes for composition and general theme. So, with that, here's my lame comment. Simply telling you how much I liked this.
Keep writing,
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Thankyou for your positive comments! I didn't really think it would go down so well ^^. I'll try to keep them comming!



It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien