OK, now it's in the right place I hope!
A Shortcut To The Sea
The velvet-soft
Quiet
Of Night.
My skin thrills
At the touch of
Chill wind.
Steep steps
With no end
that I can see,
And a hand to guide me
Gripping tight.
My senses
In flames,
As the shadow creeps
Up my legs.
I might drown in it;
I don't care.
No more than a footstep
On level ground
And the hand that grips
Pulls me back.
Suddenly
Hands find
Bare shoulders;
The space
Between bodies
Vanishes;
And your mouth on mine...
I'm breathless.
And there is no sound
But the sea
Breathing for us.
I wanted to write something about this, and this is my first attempt. I feel like it's maybe too direct and simple, but I don't know how someone else would see it! Any thoughts, please share them! I'm especially uncertain about that 'Suddenly'; it feels too much, but without it it's not enough! I need someone else's perspective! Thanks.
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