You are music

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You are Music

You’re as tender as a Love song
Rebellious as Hip-hop

Sweet as a Lullaby
Insane as Rock

Spiritual as Gospel
Risqué like Dancehall

Soulful as Jazz
Upbeat like Techno

Emotional like the Blues
Vibrant as Reggae

Wild like Soca
Hip as Country

Impromptu as Rap
Mixed-up as Dub

Conservative
as a Folksong
Loyal as an Anthem

Thoughtful as Conscious
Feisty as Chutney

Playful
as a Nursery Rhyme
Sophisticated as the Classics

You are generic
You are unspecific
You are like music
Everyone loves your magic.
*Let us rise and be thankful, for if we didn't learn a lot today, at least we learned a little, and if we didn't learn a little, at least we didn't get sick, and if we got sick, at least we didn't die; so, let us all be thankful.--Buddha*




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Hey,

This poem, wasn't really a poem. It was a list. And didn't really have much to it. . . . I think you need to go through it and make it more poetic as at the moment it doesn't stand at and doesn't feel like anything special.

Sorry for the nagativity.

~Retro Disco666
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Hey,

This poem, wasn't really a poem. It was a list. And didn't really have much to it. . . . I think you need to go through it and make it more poetic as at the moment it doesn't stand at and doesn't feel like anything special.

Sorry for the nagativity.

~Retro Disco666
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~Francoise Sagan




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RetroDisco was right, it was more like a list. I didn't show any emotion at all. A poem needs more than metaphor. It needs emotion, detail, your senses. I'm not great at writing poetry, but I know things it needs. Sorry, maybe you should try putting it in poem form. Keep writing.
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I strongly disagree with the above posts. I loved this! So it was a little list-y, but so what? I like how you characterize each type of music (a few of which I'd never even heard of!). I also thought the bold print added a nice creative touch. *Likes* :)
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With all the force of a great typhoon,
With all the strength of a raging fire,
Mysterious as the dark side of the moon.




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Hey there! I'm going to have to agree with Warriorprincess on this, this was good! I thought that you used the different styles of music well to describe someone. Keep it up!
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This was kind of different for me, but I think I liked it? So what if there wasn't a lot of emotion thrown into it, it was different, and creative writing is all about what you feel! I liked the repetition, personally, it really nailed the idea that you were describing a person into my head. Keep up the good work (:




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Hey, thank you guys for commenting.

I know it was a bit like a list, but it was really to show the comparison between the various type of music and individuals personality. I enjoyed writing it. It was playful to me.

To those of you who have never heard of a few of these types of music, just explore. I'm from Tobago and we have a wide variety of music.

Saying thank you again
---Des
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Hi I actually like it. I don't agree with people saying that you need to put it in the poem format because in my opinion poems shouldn't be cliche or stereotyped this is the beauty behind them. I like the way you related the characteristics of who you was talking about with music it was actually nice.A list would be saying: you are tender,you are rebellious, you are this and that but for who listens to music they would be able to imagine what you are saying :)




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Hiya!
Well I am in the imbetween. (:
It was indeed a little list like... but still...
It was VERRRRRRY creative... and cool! I liked how you put together each style of music... some I have nevvverheard of... and put it together.
But... it was also a little list-y... I would maybe say to find a better catagory if there is one... if there isn't... then keep it here no matter what they sayy! Because it was creative, and very likable!
Over all..
*LIKE!*
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