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Feeling you-a song



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Fri Jul 08, 2005 10:11 pm
Misty says...



For the record, this is in the pop/rock/punk genre-sort of a mix of all of them.

Feeling you

vs. 1

Hey,
you make me crazy
you give me a smile
and then take it away,

Hey,
I wanna be your baby
it could take me a while
to get my way,

*pre-chorus*

And you love me today, but what about, what about tomorrow
Don’t take this away, can’t live without, live without your hollow heart,

~Chorus~

‘Cuz you aren’t feeling me
And I’m so feeling you
And you won’t let me be
my heart beats for two

And your smile blows me away
Come back today, come today, stay, just stay till tomorrow, wait till tomorrow
you and your hollow heart

vs. 2

Why
do you do this to me,
you’re playing with me
messing with my head

Why,
can’t you just tell me
are we gonna be,
or do you want her instead?

*pre-chorus 2*

And you loved me yesterday, but what about, what about forever
Don’t take this away, we gonna be, gonna be, gonna be together?

~Chorus 2~

‘Cuz babe you mess me up
And I just want to know
Should I hold on or break up
Should I let you go

And your smile blows me away
Come back today, come today, stay, just stay till tomorrow, wait till tomorrow
you and your hollow heart

*bridge*

You mess me up, you mix it up
boy, you keep me questioning
you shake it up, and twist me up,
oh, you keep me guessing
you keep me guessing

I still want you, but I don’t know
do you want me too, you won’t let me know
Am I all for you?

~Chorus 3~

‘Cuz you aren’t feeling me
and I’m so feeling you,
I just want us to be,
I’m the perfect girl for you,

And your smile blows me away
Come back today, come today, stay, just stay till tomorrow, wait till tomorrow
you and your hollow heart
  





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Sat Jul 09, 2005 12:17 pm
Chevy says...



It was really nice...cliche--but it made a good song.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.
  





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Sun Jul 10, 2005 1:36 am
Misty says...



hmmm...yeah I guess it was cliche. didn't feel cliche when I wrote it though. it felt heartfelt...
  








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