Poop Poop

Hehe, lol. I can't believe I wrote this poem and had the guts to post it on YWS. I don't regret writing this poem, I had so much fun, couldn't stop laughing at its pathetic-ness XD. Hope you like it! If you don't, please don't post a horrible comment

I could almost taste my excretion,
I want to taste it.

I could almost lick my excretion,
I want to lick it.

I could almost touch my excretion,
I want to touch it.

Is your's brown? Is it black?
Maybe colour is its lack.

Is it green? Or maybe yellow?
Does it look like a Fugly marshmallow?

Is it nice? Is it 'fit'?
Why don't you try to slowly eat it?

Once it's down, you'll love the taste
You'll never want your Poop to go to waste.

Sixteen, Seventeen, Eighteen, Nine.
Troop, Loop, Poop Poop Poop

Wow! This was truly great! I really want to eat my own poop now! And I might as well go and eat some scabs while I'm at it as well. Why not some used chewing gum mixed with fresh vomit? I'm sure it's all good right? I mean you should know, Mr. Asylum Phobia dude?

Maybe you should post something serious? YWS is not a poop zone.

What is this forum turned into??? The moderators really need to do something. Go fight somewhere else!

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Um, what the hell is this? If it was an attempt at serious poetry, no comment. If it was an attempt at humor, it's even lower than slapstick.

OMG! This is like the coolest poem ever! Screw the others that think this poem sucks! It's better than all those dry boring love strange poems that don't make sense! Yay For Me Poo!

To be honest, I agree as well. It sucks, I know, but the point is I had so much fun writing this XD And that's what a hobby of writing is about, isn't it? Having fun? Well, keep in touch if you want to read another pathetic poem that doesn't desvere to be on YWS but still happens to be posted.

Hmm. No comment.

I found your poem about phobias funny. I'm not so sure about this one though. I like the randomness, but not the idea of eating poo. The images this put in my head weren't that pleasant.

Still, each to their own. I'm sure someone out there likes eating poo (Not really).

At least this poem is unique. I'll vote that I like eating poo just because the poem is random, not because I actually do.

Hehe, obviously I don't like eating poo. No one does, unless there's someone very strange out there ... Anyone want to come forward?

I will! It's my second favourite food!

ThienThienThien wrote:To be honest, I agree as well. It sucks, I know, but the point is I had so much fun writing this XD And that's what a hobby of writing is about, isn't it?

Incorrect. Writing for oneself is an endless circle going nowhere; it does not lead to any sort of improvement or development of concepts and the self. True writing, good writing, is meant to communicate an idea or interact with an audience in an effort to make the poet's stances on life and its issues, whether they be those of human nature, wordly happenstances, or super-realistic questions of man.

Never think that writing just to please your own image of joy and conscience will lead you anywhere. After all, if you just write so that you will be happy, then why bother to go beyond simplistic, basic ideas? If it suits you the first time you do it, then there is no point furthering you abilities and thoughts.

OK... thanks..

Wow.

Didn't realize YWS was getting so serious.

Sure, it's probably not a publishable piece, but sometimes you just have to have fun. Now, I can understand a bit of the debate -- after all, when you post pieces on YWS, generally you're looking for critiques so you can improve it. This poem, then, may better belong in a blog. But it's not a life-or-death situation, people. No need to flame the author.

Oh, and Galerius: people write for different reasons. Yes, some focus on communicating some truth to the audience. Some also focus on entertaining people, or simply bringing the audience into a make-believe world. Actually, I write for all of these reasons, and have examples of each. But writing should always be enjoyable! Once you start writing just to make a profit, you lose the craft. At some level, you should always have a little fun with it.

Ever read "Where the Sidewalk Ends"? It is chock full of stupid little poems like this that make you laugh your head off. This would almost be good enough to put in a silly-poem book!

Thanks, TexanWriter I'll be sure to find that! I'm in need of a good laugh XD