Young Writers Society

Magnificent sea, great and vast in size,
you are there as I open my eyes.
Each time I ride your waters, memories fill my cup.
Though my wife was taken by your fearful might,
I stay brave and loyal, for this is an ocean's rite.

Divine waters! To my children I teach the wisdom of the sea..

You extend your arms to my children.
And their smiles make the sun rise again and again.
Their joy is filled by our humble and loving presence.
And when I stared deeper at our blue nature,
I forgot my miseries and pains I used to endure.

Blessed waters, my sole provider! These songs I sing everyday.

Day by day I need not fear,
for your hands offer fish a plenty.
And the salty midnight breezes bring tranquility.
Enchanting is the calm voice of your waves;
and eternal is the food in your palms, in my sea who saves!

Not bad, but it seemed a little awkward at times. I think you need to work on the flow a bit. As an example, you might want to fix the repetition of "children" in the second and third stanzas. That may help. Also, the last two lines seemed very forced. Fix that, and not a bad poem!