Simple but lovely. Cool how you created such a vivid image with so few words. I like the simile comparing the stars to pearls on a necklace; very unique.Nice work.
"I myself am composed entirely of flaws, stitched together with good intentions."- Augusten Burroughs
I agree - lovely. The thing about haiku's is that there isnt enough there to really critique, LOL, so I'm stuck without much to say. Oh well. I loved it anyway. It was very smooth; I found it peaceful, though that could just be the way stars make me feel. Also, I like the way you linked the jewelry idea in both lines. Very well done.
Oooh, I love haikus, especially when they're done well, like this one. Like bubbles said, there's not a whole lot to critique, but you wrote it very well, and created lots of good images in a very small space. And it was cool how the jewelry seemed to link the other two stanzas together.
Nice work!
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"Most of us have far more courage than we ever dreamed we possessed."
- Dale Carnegie
you should do more poetry
