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Will he notice me?



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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:26 am
ladydark says...



Will he ever notice me?
I notice him, sitting here in a dark corner
Gazing upon the one who captured my heart

The gleam in his hair
the sparkle in his eyes.
His eyes are beautiful by the way...

His nose, wonderful
it would look odd on any others
but on his face? Its amazing.

His smile, perfect
his lips, so tender...
his laugh, magical and warm

He means the world to me
I want to make him happy
I want him to love me... as much as I love him

I want to mean the world to him,
and so much more...
But, will he notice me?

The plain girl, sitting in the corner.
Doesnt matter if I'm the class clown
I'm not pretty. I'm not popular...

Why would he notice me?
Oh but if he could, but wait...
he is walking over to me.

he's taking my hand
pulling me out of the darkness
he wraps his arms around me

He holds me close, looking into my eyes
he tilts my head up and gives me a kiss.
A glorious kiss, showing that he did.

He noticed me.
“I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying.”

"Foul devil, for God's sake, hence, and trouble us not;
For thou hast made the happy earth thy hell,
Fill'd it with cursing cries and deep exclaims." (Richard III 1.2) Shakespeare
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:32 am
Dargquon Ql'deleodna says...



nice poem, happy ending depressing type beginning, good job. one question, is this based on an event in your life......
Life's a B*tch, slap it upside the head.

Dargquon Ql'deleodna: (n) "Dar-qu-on Kel-del-ode-na" something i made up that sounded cool, partially based off of the Drow Drizzt Do'Urden's name style
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:33 am
Elizabeth says...



Aww this was beautiful :)
Although I would be a bit wary if somebody I liked randomly kissed me out of nowhere... wouldn't the class go EEEW? :P

Anywya, this was pretty, but I found it odd you managed to describe his nose :P I can never ever do that :P Nice one. And love the icon pic.
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:34 am
ladydark says...



hehe, I have a bit of obsession with noses, if I like your nose, I'll be like... NOSE! -poke- ooo nice nose... and ya... this happend when I about 15, now the guy is dead... but I still think about him after all these years... and thanks TBR
“I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying.”

"Foul devil, for God's sake, hence, and trouble us not;
For thou hast made the happy earth thy hell,
Fill'd it with cursing cries and deep exclaims." (Richard III 1.2) Shakespeare
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:36 am
Dargquon Ql'deleodna says...



wow.... that sucks.... sorry to hear that....
Life's a B*tch, slap it upside the head.

Dargquon Ql'deleodna: (n) "Dar-qu-on Kel-del-ode-na" something i made up that sounded cool, partially based off of the Drow Drizzt Do'Urden's name style
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:38 am
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thanks... ya... don't drink and drive, lost two people that night, one who captured my heart and holds it still, and the other my bestest friend in the world who gave me my love... maybe I'll write something about that night sometime...
“I am so clever that sometimes I don't understand a single word of what I am saying.”

"Foul devil, for God's sake, hence, and trouble us not;
For thou hast made the happy earth thy hell,
Fill'd it with cursing cries and deep exclaims." (Richard III 1.2) Shakespeare
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:41 am
Zelalem says...



That's such a sweet poem. But the story you have is very sad...
"life is not about the breaths you take, but the moments that take your breath away"
  





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Tue Jan 31, 2006 12:41 am
Elizabeth says...



Aww, I'm sorry about that.... To try and cheer you up, I'll send you a picture of my nose :P. *Huggles ladydark*
  








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