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Mon Jan 23, 2012 5:22 am
vkshravi88 says...



What is a lie?
The progeny of Satan
The master of deception
An intentional misconception

What is a lie?
Knives in form of words
For once said they do hurt
And in them does poison lurk

People say sometimes
Two wrongs can make a right
This is not true
Especially for a lie

Why do we lie?
Because we all can
Because some care for themselves
More than any other man

Why do we lie?
You could ask yourself
It’s hard to reform
But not impossible

Why are we honest?
Because we all can be
And because we know that
Lying is not a key

It is a dagger
A picker of the lock
But it can never open
The door of truths stock

What is a lie?
And why do we use it?
Because there is no good without bad
Because darkness does exist
The complex journey of life begins with a simple step forward
Vikash
  





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Wed Jan 25, 2012 1:04 am
ShaunaJAY says...



This isn't bad, I like your style, reminds me of my own. One thing I will say I noticed and I think would make all the difference is if you added comas and full stops after each line where neccessary. Good use of vocabulary and word choice, though some minor improvements could be made. Nice work :)
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