Young Writers Society

Very nice written... Good images, very well thought.

yeah, who rearranges the puzzle so that it is pretty again
when make-up designers and costume directors aren’t there
to fix what isn’t broken?

bit confused... but I think I know what you mean..
Is it about your b-friend again?

Xia

No. It's about human nature.

The whole "fix what isn't broken" line is supposed to say that we have to accept Fate, as who we are, and we can't say we are "broken" because we have nothing to compare ourselves with, other than other people, and that's a fruitless task anyway.

"Blood is prettier in movies,
when it is not mixed with tears and
life is prettier in movies,"

Perfect. A beautiful way to start off a poem. I like the idea of blood and tears mixing together.

"When tears fall they splash
and when kids fall they bleed
but what happens when
we collapse in fits of sobs"

I like it that you take two absolutes, and then mix it with a question. It was a great way of making us think, and it was beautiful. Picturesque. Overall, those two parts were the best for me, but the rest was just so-so, you know? I like it as a whole, though. It was beautiful

oh yeah and awesome title!