I need hard, honest critisism,pleeeeeeeez.
I believe everyone
Can have an opinion on the matter.
I used to be idealistic,
And what's called a romantic,
But that was before.
It was quite ironic.
I worried about high school,
Boyfriends, make up, PMS.
A spouse, a work schedule, and finances.
Cancer, osteoperosis, and arthritis
I used to think about dying.
I bet between cancer and old age.
My naivete was amazing.
I didn't think to put
A Friday night joyride
On the ticket.
The ER doctor told my parents
I died instantly.
" No pain," he said.
Pain? What is pain?
Pain is a mere jab in one's flesh.
Agony is flying
through a windshield.
Agony is landing in a crunching heap
On the asphalt,
Twenty feet away.
I won't fault them.
After all,
It was only five seconds
Of excruciating agony.
I could almost feel as
My memories dimmed like a
Candle at the bottom of its wax.
Then Time left my reality,
And I was alone.
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