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Sun Feb 20, 2005 8:24 am
dullsky says...



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Meshugenah says...



omg. That's really all I can say about this, Brad. It.. a feeling of helplessness. A few lines didn't quite flow, like the last line of the first stanza, but it still works. really well.
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Firestarter says...



It's great, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Beautiful stanzas and a deep tone that really hits home.

The third stanza's last line, although I can see what you were trying to do, is a little odd. I don't like the 'okay?' tag question on the end.

But that's my only little nitpick, I can't see much else.
  





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Misty says...



*shock*

omg...so beautiful....*wipes tear*

do not respond to an e-mail,
long after the fact, and confess
your unadulterated love for
pasta and wild parties and crazy little boys,
just don’t. okay? *Bahahahahahah!HA!*


remember to wave goodbye
next time you speed down an old dirt road
and leave behind a heritage of so many
colors and people and
life and home, sweet home
*pretty*
  








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