Young Writers Society

I love this. Very pretty imagery, and the lines

but as a greater god who might
drop french fry crumbs
or even a mc-chicken nugget
in offering.
(pigeons these days have all turned to cannibalism)

somehow reminded me of something David Sedaris would write. (A compliment of the highest degree! If you don't know who it is, check him out!)

Hey...now I get the second one after reading this one again. lol, sorry.

It's very well-written. A bit on the scary side but I'm almost positive you meant it that way. I love it. You might not want to put those things you wrote in (parentheses), but try to incorporate them into the poem. That's my only criticism.