Young Writers Society

In the calm of night,
In the absence of light,
screams fill the air in song.
Your voice and mine,
souls left behind,
though some screams do not belong.
Blue winter's white light,
Red summer so so bright, all beware
the coming of night!

Screeching sounds fill the night,
sounds that turn my
fear to delight.
Bleeding tounges of warm red rivers,
bitter sweet tears and
icy blue shivers.

The night brings a chill,
peace will be still.
A murderous room with no light to fill!
The night lays a blanket
of ivory threads,
hell welcomes the theif of
severed heads!

Yet all that is left is screaming
black nights.
it shall begin when the sun
sheds no light.
when the weak arise and the
strong cease to fight.
I shall welcome you to the choir
of Screams in the Night!!!

This poem has a real dark and gloomy concept to it and the language you use really engages the reader and allows them to sink everything you are trying to convey in your writing

In the calm of night,
In the absence of light,
screams fill the air in song.
Your voice and mine,
souls left behind,
though some screams do not belong.
Blue winter's white light,
Red summer so so bright, all beware
the coming of night!

I Highlighted the first stanza as it really sets the tone and the feel of the poem,

The first two lines are my favorite as it quite smart but really simple which i really enjoy

Anyway well done and carry on writing, you have great potential.

I really liked this poem, though I feel as though the theme was very generic. I kinda had just a generic "themed" picture in my head. My remedy for this would be to add, not MORE descriptive language, but more HIGHLIGHTING for the language. Use more descriptive words, a deeper vocabulary. It had a good rhythm, but the rhyme through me off at times when it wasn't exact, and I feel as though it was more distracting that emphasizing. Use rhymes to emphasize, not JUST to make pretty. You want your most important words highlighted, so you want them to rhyme, which means you want to form the poem around them. Goodluck, this poem is actually very, very good .

oh, very dark, like the night. It makes me want to laugh evilly.

I love this poem, the first line really caught me and kept me up until the last word,
my favorite stanza was

The night brings a chill,
peace will be still.
A murderous room with no light to fill!
The night lays a blanket
of ivory threads,
hell welcomes the theif of
severed heads!

This was a nice poem to read, great job.