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Roses, raindrops, candlelight dinners,
snowflakes, sunshine, and being a winner.
Old fashioned writing, peace signs, and doves,
these are just some of the things that I love.

dewdrops on flowerbuds, running through leaves,
fireplaces in winter, a cool summer breeze.
Frost on the ground, fog in the sky,
The feeling I get when looking down from on high.

Whispers that tickle, laughter that lasts,
talking to someone you met in your past.
Sharing a secret, trying something new,
handing in an assignment before it is due.

I like eyes that are windows into someone's mind,
doing something nice for someone unkind.
I love the love that is unconditionally given,
but most of all, I love my Father in heaven.

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First off, let me say I love the simplicity of this poem. We really need a break for these elaborate and dissected poems that seem to be in another language -_-
Also, many say that rhyming is annoying, cliche and overrated, but I say you handled it well in some parts, and not so well in others. Some rhyming sounds stressed while the rest sounds natural and relevant to the poem's theme. I saw some grammatical errors as well, and, at first, the style of the poem was a little hard to follow.

Roses, raindrops, candlelight dinners,
snowflakes, sunshine, and being a winner.
Old fashioned writing, peace signs, and doves,
these are just some of the things that I love. Not a bad attention grabber there, and either your reader will be pulled by it's simplistic and fun nature or will leave due to it. That just depends on the reader there.

dewdrops on flower buds, running through the leaves, "Flower buds" are two words
fireplaces in winter, a cool summer breeze.
Frost on the ground, fog in the sky,
The feeling I get when looking down from on high. This last sentence sounded kind of stressed, like you just placed it there for the purpose of rhyming. Maybe you can come up with something more relevant and better.

Whispers that tickle, laughter that lasts,
talking to someone you met in your past. My favorite part <3
Sharing a secret, trying something new,
handing in an assignment before it is due.This is good as well

I like eyes that are windows into someone's mind,
doing something nice for someone unkind. True :/
I love the love that is unconditionally given,
but most of all, I love my Father in heaven.] I really like this last part, for it is touching. The only thing is heaven does not really rhyme with given. But, that is up to you.

So, that is what I have to say. This is a nice, touching, and playful poem. Keep up the good work!

Your poem is great, and I love how you used rhyming and made it simple.
But I agree with the other author that a few lines seem a little forced.
Originally, I was going to point out a line I thought was a little off, but after reading it through a few more times it made sense.
I do have a suggestion:
"dewdrops on flower buds, running through leaves,"
could be changed to:
"dewdrops on flowers, running through leaves."

Its great the way it is, though. Well done!