Forecast

This doesn't exactly spin me in the air at several hundred miles per hour and then dump me in some godforsaken country field, but it was solid. Nothing special but it made sense.

Four year later, my older brother boarded a train
Did you mean four years later?

I'm a leaf blown through a twister.
Great for the middle of the poem...loved this lines.

Overall, I liked the literal sense to this poem...that's my favorite thing in a poem because I usually feel like I can relate somehow. Not sure I captured the whole meaning--a little vague (or maybe I'm just a little slow) but I liked it still--as always. You get me every time, my friend.

There wasn't much imagery and didn't make me feel anything while reading the poem. try including stronger descriptions of things, it may improve it.

I loved it. Lots of imagery (subtle, but there). At least, it gave me plenty of mental pictures and a vague sense of understanding. Once again, cant resist your poetry, Incandescence. Another awesome piece.

I enjoyed this very much. The imagery was very crisp to me. I especially like the part about the boy in the bathtub. But my favorite lines were -

Once I pirouetted through a city park
saying, I'm a leaf blown through a twister.

Very interesting read.

Bett

I liked this. I agree that it's got good imagery and I liked the way the lines carry on through the poem and the way the stories all link seamlessly. I also thought that it was fairly original...well I've never read a good poem about a tornado before! Really enjoyed reading it. Go you!