If I ever,

If I ever,'

If I were to fall in love, it'd be for you and your charms.
And if I ever were to fall, I'd like to fall into your arms.

If I were to be heartbroken, it'd be you who broke my heart.
And if I ever were to be broken, I'd like you to tear me apart.

If I were dead, it'd be you who killed me with your charms.
And if I ever were dying, I'd like to die in your arms.

Well I have one word for this: wow!! I rarely come across a piece of slightly depressing poetry that I actually enjoy; I'm too much of an optimist. I haven't got any bad comments, so sorry on that front for the lack of valuable improvements. Still... it's always nice to be appreciated, huh?

Very very good piece! excellent job. there may be a way to smoothe out flow however. It is very good and i love the imagery. Try and find the Perfect word that will take out that pesky extra syllable. "The difference between a good word and the right word is the difference between lightning and the lightning bug, we are in the lightning business"--roger rosenblatt

This is great, I love it! Just as IcyFlame said, I have never been a fan of sad romantic poetry, but I really love this. There are really no productive comments that I can give you, and that might be partially due to the fact that I have never been a picky reader. But nevertheless, great work!
-Alex

Wow I really loved this. =] It's like, love and heartbreak all in one! Great job! I like your style, let me know if you ever need a review. I also loved the rhythm. The rhymes were great and you didn't jump out of place even once. Keep it up.

Aow, Thanks alot everyone!
And No, you can never get enough appreciation! xD

// Hugs and Hearts from Sagaa

I'm not really sure what to say. I'm trying to figure out what happened- but i'm pretty sure I was just blown away by the power of this piece. This wicked great work changed my emotions the very moment I read it- in other words the energy/images/power of your poem lifted a heavy spirit. This is a great work of art (BTW Thank you)

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Wow. This was incredible! It was very simple, short, and to the point I loved it!!

I appreciate it! Thanxx alot!

All I can say is that this is amazing! I am normally not a big fan of heartbreaking poems but this was awesome. The rhyming. flowed really nicely and it wasn't forced. There's not much else to say so great job!
-Hope

Wow! I love this! It feels like it's looped from beginning to end and connects so solidly! Love it!

Thank you guys!

Short. Sweet. Simple.
Keep it up.

Thank you, Thanks, Thanxx xDD