for Nick, 'Tendrils of Gaze' (needs work...)

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You are so very fragile that I feel forced
to suffocate you in bubblewrap and enclose you
in a cardboard box (this side up) and send
you (my poetry) through UPS, addressed to me.

tsk tsk tsk :P naughty little you
poor mail man

nice work you sack of brad




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Is this too short, too sympathetic, or just bad all around? I can't decide.
Nick's picture is on my blog.
"If I have not seen as far as others, it is because giants were standing on my shoulders." -Hal Abelson




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not too short, not too sympathetic and not bad.
And I saw his pic.

happy now?




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Yes, I am.
"If I have not seen as far as others, it is because giants were standing on my shoulders." -Hal Abelson




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The last stanza made me laugh...marshmallow...hehe. Maybe something like 'wax'? I'm not sure. The marshmallow makes it sound très stupid.
Graffiti is the most passionate form of literature there is.

- Demetri Martin




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Eh... It was kind of sappy... I know, I shouldn't be one to talk about sappiness... Lovely, I guess I can say, yet it made me laugh throughout... but it's not bad or short.




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hm...who is this Nick...

*goes to brads blog*
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien