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heartbreaker
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Points: 6090
Reviews: 1258
Tue Apr 05, 2005 8:39 pm
Sam
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Short, sweet, to the point. Basically, that is all I have to say.
Graffiti is the most passionate form of literature there is.
- Demetri Martin
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Thu Apr 07, 2005 11:24 pm
LonelyDragon
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I really liked this. Brings back memories. Though, maybe you could expand it?
"but instead, we found worthless projector slides
and empty cans to kick around
while we waited on unpromised miracles
and the air to fill our lungs."
I love that... heh Nice work.
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Points: 890
Reviews: 321
Sat Apr 09, 2005 7:53 am
Liz
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Pretty. I like the personal aspect of it, it really adds feeling to the poem. A little more impact would be good, but the simplicity is very effective. Nice work.
purple sneakers
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Points: 6165
Reviews: 665
Sat Apr 09, 2005 9:25 pm
Chevy
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did you...change something?
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.
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