say a little prayer,
to that person there.
it all builds up,
we're gonna die tonight.
say a little prayer,
'cause it's all gonna crash
when this angel
heads toward hell tonight.
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ohhewwo wrote:Pretty cool.
I think you need to put in an adjective describing the angel, just for rythmic purposes, in the next to last line. You need some sort of filler right there. That's really all that I can see right now that should be changed. I think that it could be revised and rewritten, to be made better. It's definately got potential.
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