Young Writers Society

There are worser things in this world
Little brother
Than a sound inablility to do more than 2 things at once
Worser things than falling to bits
At the slightest pressure
Worser things than not having a date to the winter formal
Worser things than poor grades
And shitty teachers
And cranky directors
And Prima Donna tech heads
Worser things than being lonely fed up empty anxious stressed scared
There are worser things in this world, little brother
Than a highschool that makes you want to puke
Most certainly there are worser things

And I pray every night they never reach your door.

Although I really like your poem, I dont think worser is a word......

I THINK it's supposed to be . . . like -erm- something that's supposed to be there.


Personally, I usually think it's best to avoid and's, or's, but's, etc. at the beginning of lines.

Also, I would try to keep your lines somewhere in the same syllable range, flows a bit better in the head, and gets the reader relaxed.

Wasn't bad, expresses a point

'Worser' is actually a word, just not used very much.

I thought in general this put across its point rather well, however I didn't like the use of the word "puke" it didn't seem to fit the tone.

i kept expecting the worser things to be identified. and i like the use of the word worser cause i here it more often from people younger or less mature so it works with the little brother thing

Worser things than falling to bits
At the slightest pressure

:smiles: