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omg. That's really all I can say about this, Brad. It.. a feeling of helplessness. A few lines didn't quite flow, like the last line of the first stanza, but it still works. really well.
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It's great, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Beautiful stanzas and a deep tone that really hits home.

The third stanza's last line, although I can see what you were trying to do, is a little odd. I don't like the 'okay?' tag question on the end.

But that's my only little nitpick, I can't see much else.




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*shock*

omg...so beautiful....*wipes tear*

do not respond to an e-mail,
long after the fact, and confess
your unadulterated love for
pasta and wild parties and crazy little boys,
just don’t. okay? *Bahahahahahah!HA!*


remember to wave goodbye
next time you speed down an old dirt road
and leave behind a heritage of so many
colors and people and
life and home, sweet home
*pretty*



Remember: when people tell you something’s wrong or doesn’t work for them, they are almost always right. When they tell you exactly what they think is wrong and how to fix it, they are almost always wrong.
— Neil Gaiman