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You cut beer cakes over my wrists, and
I wince - enchanted eyes, you watch my
artwork and it burns you, I hope that it
turns you away. This is a game.
I wonder why I am so childlike, ribbon-dancing
around your soap bubble and glass scar heart.
I paint trees in foam and write suicide notes
three days early. How could I expect success unless
I redirect your veins to you hands [just like mine]
and fight fire with fire and sin with sin?
People are brittle, but they always win.
Carpe Diem.




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Your poem definitely exudes some surrealism. I find it quite odd-sounding, but that is indeed the nature of surrealist work. I'm not sure what else exactly to say about it. I like it though. :)
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Every time I’ve gotten feedback that was hard to take it was usually hard to take because there was truth in it and I didn’t like that (or didn’t want to receive it). That’s not to say all harsh feedback is good or that we should be harsh for harshness’ sake, but learning to absorb truth without letting it break your inner core/break you is a lifelong skill that keeps your mind elastic and open to learning.
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