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Hope (re-done)

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Hope




I left behind my dreams along a desert highway
I waited ‘till my soul began to fly away
I spilled my pitcher of faith into the Dead Sea
Watching life, float away from me…


I had given up without a doubt
Feeling empty from the inside out
I was enclosed in my own bleakness
With nothing left in me, but weakness


Dry mouthed and dreary eyed,
Forgotten essence and vacant pride
Hollow tears trickle down
In a puddle of sorrow, they slowly drown


Yet still deep down, was that streak of hope,
I knew for this there was no need to grope
For, once again the sun would shine bright,
To lead the way and clear the night


It was time for a bad past to be forgotten
For that last bit of hope, not to rotten
So I shut my eyes, then opened wide
No more pain I felt inside


All new dreams flood my head,
A spark of faith begins to spread
An all new me is here today
And may I say, I’m here to stay.
Youngwriter06




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Much better. :wink:
Gone, gone from New York City,
where you gonna go with a head that empty?
Gone, gone from New York City,
where you gonna go with a heart that gone?




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I like this alot. good use of rythm
amor, pérdida, y la vida vivimos en medio.



Maybe what most people wanted wasn't immortality and fame, but the reassurance that their existence had meant something. No matter how long... or how brief. Maybe being eternal meant becoming a story worth telling.
— Roshani Chokshi, Aru Shah and the Nectar of Immortality